Writing Test

Walt: write a narrativeWalt: use and write paragraphs, detailed sentences, juicy words, full stops, capital letters and correct spelling.

It was a cold windy day everyone inside nobody came out because it was so cold that snow even came down from the sky. One cold day there was a man his name was Sam he had a brother and his name was Jack. Sam and Jack were brave men that they want to go on a hike or swim in the sea. They lived in a little farm with their mum and dad and their little black and white dog.

One night Sam and Jack got their lifejacket and their kayak ready to go to the dangerous creeks it had eels and shark and even jellyfish. Padding in creek dog were howling in the night  Jack was starting to get scared he want to go back home. Suddenly Jack and Sam

started to stop they could hear something from underneath. Suddenly something came out underneath the kayak and SNAP! A Shark bite Sam's kayak in half kayak. Pieces of the kayak started to float down the river. Jack was screaming for help but no-one was around to save him except Sam.

Jack started hitting the shark with his paddle. Sam started to swim over to Jack and then jumped into the kayak. Paddling as fast as he could away from the shark. After paddling for awhile they finally got to an island. Both Sam and Jack were breathing very loud and were very tired but they were safe.